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and all things rabbity, my free-verse picture book,
To Rabbittown, originally published by Scholastic,

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Wait...what do you mean it needs some editing?????

No, I disagree...I really think the words, "severed head" work in this poem.

Yeah, well, thanks for your suggestions. Let me think about them; NO.

I do believe I'm entitled to a nap after an exhausting session ripping my poem apart..

This is Eli. Pronounced eeee-lye.

Hi there!  Welcome to RuffDrafts.com–I’m glad you’re here!

My original poems, posted each day of National Poetry Month 2013, are imperfect. Messy.  This is your chance to sneak a peek behind the scenes—before a poem is polished and published! (For my poems in 2010, 2011 & 2012, click on the Poetry link in the menu above.)

My friend Bruce Balan and I critique each other’s poems every day…so you’ll see Bruce’s comments on some of the poems.

Thanks for following so well.  I’m tempted to take you to the dog park and let you romp off-leash… Ready?  Let’s begin!

 

April 3

SEPARATED AT BIRTH


 

SEPARATED AT BIRTH ~ rough draft!
by April Halprin Wayland

Big Benjamin is joking about being on a diet.
“When my wife reached her fork to taste my turkey,
I nearly bit her hand off!”

Wait—
who did I just meet that reminds me of Ben?

At the store, Stella confides she’s shy around new people.
“Sometimes it comes out in nippy ways,” she says.
“I just want to back into a corner.”

Stella reminds me of someone…
who?

In the elevator, June hisses, “Shhh!
People are tapping my phone, watching my car, monitoring my credit cards.”
Poor little June.

Didn’t I just see someone exactly like June?
Where was I?

Oh—
the dog park!

That Rottweiler guarding his Frisbee,
growling at any dog that came within three feet of it…

the nippy terrier
barking at all comers from behind her owner’s legs…

that shivering Chihuahua
too paranoid to leave her owner’s arms…

Trust me—we all have a twin
at the dog park.

Does Eli look like me?

Bruce says of this one: “Good concept. Clever. But rough execution.”

And I say it’s too long.  But it still makes me laugh!

poem © 2013 April Halprin Wayland. All rights reserved

2 Responses to “SEPARATED AT BIRTH”

  1. I like the concept behind this one too. I often see dogs who remind me of people I know.

  2. April says:

    Yes, Susan…it can be spooky!

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