In honor of Poetry Month, Easter, Passover,
and all things rabbity, my free-verse picture book,
To Rabbittown, originally published by Scholastic,
is 99 cents on iTunes, Kindle, Nook–yippee!
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if you don’t have an eReader.
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Wait...what do you mean it needs some editing?????
No, I disagree...I really think the words, "severed head" work in this poem.
Yeah, well, thanks for your suggestions. Let me think about them; NO.
I do believe I'm entitled to a nap after an exhausting session ripping my poem apart..
This is Eli. Pronounced eeee-lye.
Hi there! Welcome to RuffDrafts.com–I’m glad you’re here!
My original poems, posted each day of National Poetry Month 2013, are imperfect. Messy. This is your chance to sneak a peek behind the scenes—before a poem is polished and published! (For my poems in 2010, 2011 & 2012, click on the Poetry link in the menu above.)
My friend Bruce Balan and I critique each other’s poems every day…so you’ll see Bruce’s comments on some of the poems.
Thanks for following so well. I’m tempted to take you to the dog park and let you romp off-leash… Ready? Let’s begin!
April 1
BEDTIME
BEDTIME ~ rough draft!
by April Halprin Wayland
Dog upstairs in crate.
Cat downstairs on couch.
Cat sleeping with one eye open
in case Dog flies down the stairs.
Dog sleeping with one eye open
in case Cat comes to visit.
Why can’t we play chase, Cat?
Why can’t you go back to wherever you came from, Dog?
Because some day I want to lie down with you curled in the circle of my tummy, Cat.
Cat wrinkles her nose.
Cat closes both eyes.
Cat purrs.
This is our cat, Snot. My husband named her.
This is a dialogue poem.
poem © 2013 April Halprin Wayland. All rights reserved5 Responses to “BEDTIME”
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- Blog entries
- April 30
THE 2013 PROGRESSIVE POEM BY 30 POETS OF THE KIDLITOSPHERE - April 29
THESE DOG POEMS - April 28
WHAT NOT TO NAME YOUR DOG - April 27
WHAT I HOPE WILL NEVER HAPPEN - April 26
Hello, I’m Buster and I’m a Chase-a-holic. Poetry Friday! - April 25
THERE ONCE WAS A DOG IN AN ENCOUNTER GROUP - April 24
SAYS THE TREE IN THE DOG PARK - April 23
GRIEF - April 22
BLACK / WHITE - April 21
O THE WIND BLOWS - April 20
GOD, DOG and TEDDY - April 19
DOG EXPLORER USES HIS NOSE - April 18
DISCIPLES AT THE DOG PARK – what to cut? - April 17
DETECTIVE DOG - April 16
IF OUR HOUSE WERE ON FIRE, WHAT WOULD I TAKE? - April 15
LOVEBIRDS KISSING IN THE DOG PARK - April 14
Try a Trimeric Poem! - April 13
DOG THOUGHTS ON A SATURDAY NIGHT - April 12
DOG PARK HAIKU - April 11
HELLO… - April 10
DOG UNTO OTHERS - April 9
INSTRUCTIONS BEFORE LEAVING - April 8
MESSAGE FROM BEYOND: A FOUND POEM - April 7
BONEHEAD - April 6
Which Version Do You Like Best? - April 5
Hello, Tree, Says the Dog - April 4
HOW MANY POEMS? HAIKU - April 3
SEPARATED AT BIRTH - April 2
MORNING DOG - April 1
BEDTIME
Love the image this poem conjures up, April!
<3 Thank you, Susan!
Great images! In the spirit of these being rough drafts that you’re posting, I wonder: what would happen if you turned this into TWO poems?
Thanks for a good idea, Janet! Let me fiddle with it.
Later: I’ve revised it two new ways:
1) as two poems
and
2) as a poem for two voices.
The last one makes me laugh.
Thanks, Janet!