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For Poetry Month 2014, I'm searching for metaphors and similes. Join me! Here's a bit more on this month's project.

April 7


I was at the hair dresser today and in my current state of must find a metaphor,
I wondered how I would describe the delicious feeling of her fingers scrubbing my scalp.

beauty salon

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As she moved me from the shampoo sink to her chair, I scribbled in my little notebook:

Scrubbing my soapy head,
Mommy’s strong fingers
are…roller brushes?
are…farmers tilling soil?
are…rough, tough waves?

Then I thought, hmmm…maybe I have it backwards.
Maybe it’s not that Mommy’s fingers are ocean waves but that ocean waves are like her fingers.

Here’s where the thesaurus can either be helpful or drive me stark, raving mad:

Ocean waves crashing,
{bashing, shattering, cracking, smacking, punching, clobbering, pressing, stroking,
massaging, kneading, pushing, playing, molding, brushing, fingering, patting, sweeping, pawing,}

Finally, after two hours and 21 revisions, I either nailed it, surrendered or gave up. You decide.

Salt water waves foaming over the sand                   
like my grandmother’s fingers shampooing the shore

How about sharing a simile or metaphor of your own…or someone else’s?

from morguefile.com

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poem © 2014 April Halprin Wayland. All rights reserved

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