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In honor of Poetry Month, Easter, Passover,
and all things rabbity, my free-verse picture book,
To Rabbittown, originally published by Scholastic,

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Wait...what do you mean it needs some editing?????

No, I disagree...I really think the words, "severed head" work in this poem.

Yeah, well, thanks for your suggestions. Let me think about them; NO.

I do believe I'm entitled to a nap after an exhausting session ripping my poem apart..

This is Eli. Pronounced eeee-lye.

Hi there!  Welcome to RuffDrafts.com–I’m glad you’re here!

My original poems, posted each day of National Poetry Month 2013, are imperfect. Messy.  This is your chance to sneak a peek behind the scenes—before a poem is polished and published! (For my poems in 2010, 2011 & 2012, click on the Poetry link in the menu above.)

My friend Bruce Balan and I critique each other’s poems every day…so you’ll see Bruce’s comments on some of the poems.

Thanks for following so well.  I’m tempted to take you to the dog park and let you romp off-leash… Ready?  Let’s begin!

 

April 1

BEDTIME


 

BEDTIME ~ rough draft!
by April Halprin Wayland

Dog upstairs in crate.
Cat downstairs on couch.

Cat sleeping with one eye open
in case Dog flies down the stairs.

Dog sleeping with one eye open
in case Cat comes to visit.

Why can’t we play chase, Cat?
Why can’t you go back to wherever you came from, Dog?

Because some day I want to lie down with you curled in the circle of my tummy, Cat.

Cat wrinkles her nose.

Cat closes both eyes.

Cat purrs.

This is our cat, Snot. My husband named her.

This is a dialogue poem.

poem © 2013 April Halprin Wayland. All rights reserved

5 Responses to “BEDTIME”

  1. Love the image this poem conjures up, April!

  2. April says:

    <3 Thank you, Susan!

  3. Janet Wong says:

    Great images! In the spirit of these being rough drafts that you’re posting, I wonder: what would happen if you turned this into TWO poems?

  4. April says:

    Thanks for a good idea, Janet! Let me fiddle with it.

  5. April says:

    Later: I’ve revised it two new ways:
    1) as two poems
    and
    2) as a poem for two voices.

    The last one makes me laugh.

    Thanks, Janet!

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